Do you Haiku????

[YODA]

Hi MAPers
I wasn't sure where to post this...

Here?
Fun & Games?
Off Topic?

Ah well - I chose here for reasons that may become clear.

So - Do You Haiku?

Here's one of mine. working on the popular western 3-5-3 approximation of the traditional Japanese 5-7-5 structure. Straightforward & funny at 1st read but working on more levels if you get it...

Haiku by YODA

Rattan Stick
"Oops up side your head"
Sweet music

[Cain]

Uh? huh? I do not seem to get it....wat's it's general idea?

|Cain|

[YODA]

This is a good place to start...

http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku/

[Cain]

umm....don't get me wrong but I m too young to understand this....was never good at writing or reciting poems :( ....me better at essays :D

|Cain|

[YODA]

LOL! Too young huh? LOL!

It was Sarah, my 13 year old daughter, who got me interested in Haiku - she was 11 at the time :D

[Cain]

Oh boy :( shame on me :( ok then let's put it this way....too old :D

|Cain|

[TkdWarrior]

no wrong cain...not too old but
u r indian to understand (http://www.asianjoke.com/Indian/you_know_you_are_indian_if.htm)
;)
-TkdWarrior-

[Cain]

LOL!!! yeah that must be it :( Nice link u hv got there dude :D

|Cain|

[big e]

so is it like a 2 or 3 sentance poem then?
which has to include a word about a season ?

[Mike Flanagan]

A question asked
as the days shorten.
Few reply.

[Stickgrappler]

using the 3-5-3 structure (1st line is 3 syllables, 2nd line is 5 syllables, and last line is 3 syllables):

FANG CHOKE by Stickgrappler

ARGH!!! Fang Choke!
Pressure on my throat!
Tapping out.

[Stickgrappler]

here's another 3-5-3

FMA Drilling by Stickgrappler

Partner drills.
Ah, rattan burning,
That sweet smell!

[LabanB]

"Do you Haiku"

Noh...;-)

Bill Lowery

[Light Ng]

Grappling
Over hook.
What move counters this?
Under hook.

Wing Chun
Tan, bong, ****.
The three poison hands.
Wing Chun Rocks.

Taekwondo
I kick heads.
I kick bellies too.
Groin is best.

My diet
I hate fish.
I hate liver too.
Bucket now!

Unhappy neighbours
Handbrake off
Whats that screeching noise.
Cat is flat.

[YODA]

LOL!

There's just gotta be a story behing that last one.

Spill it!

[Light Ng]

Not about me thankfully. LOL

Our next door neighbour recently ran over another neighbours cat. It was still alive and he didnt bother taking it to the vet - it died an hour later. The vet said it might have lived if it was brought in. The atmosphere is very cuttable at the moment.

[YODA]

His ****** neck would have been very cuttable if it had been MY cat.

I love my pussy cat :D

[pesilat]

You'll have already seen these, Yoda, since you're on the ED list too :-)

"Training with Grandmaster" by Mike Casto
Ow, ow, ow
Oh, ow, oh, ouch, OW
That's awesome!


"Siniwalli With Newbie" by Mike Casto
Clack, clack, clack
Finger hit, ouchie
Clack, clack, clack


And here's another:

"The Secret of Martial Arts" by Mike Casto
Secret is
Train, train, train, train, done?
Hah! Train More.

Mike

[big e]

The seasonal theme.

Each Haiku must contain a kigo, a season word, which indicate in which season the Haiku is set. For example, cherry blossoms indicate spring, snow indicate winter, and mosquitoes indicate summer, but the season word isn't always that obvious.

sorry people some of yours i cant see any seasonal words

[YODA]

Big E - Only seasonal Haiku need a seasonal reference - now go slap yourself on the forehead and shout DOH!

[big e]

Ian slaps himself repeatedly on the head
with cold cold hands !
while repeatedly shouts
DOH ! ! !

[Cain]

Hmm.....came across the haiku-o-matic :D

see here -

http://www.smalltime.com/haiku.html

|Cain|

[Brad Ellin]

Bitter, biting cold
Ten fingers and toes frozen
Good to be alive

[Cudgel]

now confused am I
Haiku thought I 5-7-5 not 3-5-3 syllables had

[YODA]

Cudgel - there are several formats. The problem isn that the traditional Japanese syllable structure does not translate well to our western languages.

[Cudgel]

makes sense thanks
so 5-7-5 is just as valid as 3-5-3?

[YODA]

Have a look at these....

English Haiku (http://www.ahapoetry.com/keirule.htm)

Haiku links (look at the rules that have come & gone) (http://www.ahapoetry.com/haiku.htm#comego)

[Ti-Kwon-Leap]

I learned the 5-7-5 format when I was five and I still cant shake the habit...for instance:

Hollywood Kung-Fu
Never works in real life
Keanu would lose:D

[YODA]

Yes - 5-7-5 is definatelty the best (IMHO) for English Haiku

[bob]

haiku for the lovers of kali:

alone i greet the dawn
opposing expectations
i sit with my stick

i sit with my stick
on the fence around the back
by yellow flowers

on my fallen foe
his bones grind in open wounds
i sit with my stick

(i admit this last one is a bit awkward)

i hit with my stick
in the wrist, toe and temple
your defeat i find

so the lesson of this haiku is that when in a bind i sit with my stick is an invaluable phase for the writer of haiku.ish-ka-bible-snot also works.

the land of the free
has an armed guard at the door
ish-ka-bible-snot

granted this technique should only be used as a last resort.
how about some 3-5-3

lost my hat
think it's on the bus
can't be sure

gotta flat
from some broken glass
monday night

i've got gas
from indian food
the brown wind

haiku rules

[Cudgel]

I would post some of mine but.. I dont want y'll to think I am mentaly unbalanced

[bob]

that a shot
feels like a shot at
haikuers

( no ofense taken, i just couldn't resist)